I really like your writing style. And god bless you for making this mobile friendly. I have two suggestions.
This is purely aesthetical, but I didn’t like the font. Helmet looks too aseptic and industrial, and it’s even worse justified. Not the best experience for reading, specially fantasy. You can’t go wrong with the classics, Times New Roman, Helvetica, or Georgia.
Move the notifications to the bottom and make it last longer. The notifications show when you turn the page and the reader’s eyes is at the bottom of the page in that moment. When I noticed the notification it was too late, it was gone. I literally missed all of them.
It's seems interesting. The only problem I had until now is the stats check. For example in the end of the demo it require a magic check, and even though I have 68 in magic, the check failed. Then i go to the stats, get back to the game and then the stat check is a sucess? Could you check that?
Overall, the story has good potential and I wish you the best
thanks ! the stat checks use a dice mechanic so it isn't a guaranteed success - I think the dice re-roll when you navigate back to the page which is what caused it to change from failure to success. I'll try look at a way for it not to re-roll on navigation: thanks for pointing it out.
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I really like your writing style. And god bless you for making this mobile friendly. I have two suggestions.
This is purely aesthetical, but I didn’t like the font. Helmet looks too aseptic and industrial, and it’s even worse justified. Not the best experience for reading, specially fantasy. You can’t go wrong with the classics, Times New Roman, Helvetica, or Georgia.
Move the notifications to the bottom and make it last longer. The notifications show when you turn the page and the reader’s eyes is at the bottom of the page in that moment. When I noticed the notification it was too late, it was gone. I literally missed all of them.
wow i enjoyed this story ^^
thank you !
your welcome ^^
It's seems interesting. The only problem I had until now is the stats check. For example in the end of the demo it require a magic check, and even though I have 68 in magic, the check failed. Then i go to the stats, get back to the game and then the stat check is a sucess? Could you check that?
Overall, the story has good potential and I wish you the best
thanks ! the stat checks use a dice mechanic so it isn't a guaranteed success - I think the dice re-roll when you navigate back to the page which is what caused it to change from failure to success. I'll try look at a way for it not to re-roll on navigation: thanks for pointing it out.
Enjoyed the demo and very excited to meet Theodorus. Lol gimme a grumpy spirit to romance and I'm happy ♥️
thank you ! you'll meet him in chaper 1 so not too long to wait :)